Chris: Images are sequential certainly –timed like a ‘joke’ which is fun. Not a whole story feeling, but a ‘stand up’ sort of quickie. Questions arise too…where is the fish in second? Did he meet his maker just before the predator did in the hands of the child? (?) It’s a moral take and has it’s place …but…
For children’s work, the characters might be better developed – more personality, better defined. I’m not sure what the brown thing is even! Colors work too for the underwater and camouflage need yet clear to us the viewer. Expressions are simple but actually do work well for such an abbreviated situation! It works!
“I like the humor here! The expression of the lizard while he’s being nabbed, for one! These remind me a bit of “That’s Not My Hat”, but a little less successful in execution. I’m confused as to what’s actually happening here. Did the lizard eat the fish? Is it the same setting in the second illustration (there are several differences in background and setting, which leads me to believe that the location of the second is different than the first). Because of these things the “story” here is unclear (despite there being text). As in books like “That’s Not My Hat”, the story is not spelled out in text, but what’s happening is very clear through the storytelling of the illustrations. The reader can easily read between the lines to deduce what happened. That’s not the case here (for me!).
Cynthia Shelton is a writer, illustrator, sailor and falconer. She has owned a fine art gallery, and a non profit for alternative fuels. She lives in Southern California with her boyfriend and dingo dog. Completed books include a non-fiction guide to choosing a falconer for pest bird abatement, and the first issue of a two volume DocuComic series about living alone on a 30′ sailboat.
If you would like to write Cynthia, please use firstname.lastname@example.org.
I want to thank Chris & Christy for taking the time to share their expertise with us. It helps so many illustrators and is very much appreciated. Here is the CATugeau Agency website link: http://www.catugeau.com/
HERE IS HOW YOU CAN PARTICIPATE:
For the next few months illustrators can submit two consecutive story illustrations for critique by CATugeau Agency.
If you do not have an agent and would like to be featured and hear what you should do or how it could be tweaked to help you sell your work, then please send Two SEQUENTIAL illustrations – not just 2 pages of illustrations, but two with the SAME “story/characters” to:
Kathy.temean (at) gmail.com. Illustrations should be at least 500 pixels wide. Please put ILLUSTRATOR PORTFOLIO in the subject area and include a blurb about yourself that I can use to introduce you to everyone.
Each Sunday one illustrator will be chosen.
If everyone likes this, we will continue until the end of the year.
CALL FOR ILLUSTRATORS: Remember I’m always looking for illustrations I can use with articles I post. Send to: Kathy.temean (at) gmail.com. Put ILLUSTRATION FOR BLOG in the subject area. Remember all illustration need to be 500 pixels wide. Include a blurb about yourself, too.